Elly May Duke Posted September 5, 2009 Report Share Posted September 5, 2009 Enos had been driving back to Hazzard from Atlanta as the plane had brought him back from LA, the whole way he listened to his and Daisy's favorite songs. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cowboy Posted September 7, 2009 Report Share Posted September 7, 2009 (*Looks around.* I thought this was a story/writing board? You see in short story books we write in paragraphes and follow a writing form. The roll playing board is over yonder, aint the admins nice to have built a board for such writing? "Watermelon Crawl" Hmmm... let me see I count four....attempts at writing on one page of this board alone that come from song titles. One infact is mine, I admit, but mine is in proper writing form. No ones perfect, but titles of songs have been done, and done again and again. Atleast make an attempt at creativity, thats what writing is about. I bet your grade school teacher would give you one big fat F! A second grader could do better.) ~Chet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B.L. Davenport Posted September 7, 2009 Report Share Posted September 7, 2009 (*Looks around.* I thought this was a story/writing board? You see in short story books we write in paragraphes and follow a writing form. The roll playing board is over yonder, aint the admins nice to have built a board for such writing? "Watermelon Crawl" Hmmm... let me see I count four....attempts at writing on one page of this board alone that come from song titles. One infact is mine, I admit, but mine is in proper writing form. No ones perfect, but titles of songs have been done, and done again and again. Atleast make an attempt at creativity, thats what writing is about. I bet your grade school teacher would give you one big fat F! A second grader could do better.) ~Chet( I am in agreement with Chet here, song titles have been done to death. As he said no one is perfect but if a story is worth writing it's just like every thing else you do it's worth putting your best effort into it. Everyone makes mistakes writing I know I do but I reread what I write and fix mistakes that I see and still don't get them all. Sometimes it helps to have someone proof read and find the things you yourself have missed.) BL Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 7, 2009 Report Share Posted September 7, 2009 Enos had been driving back to Hazzard from Atlanta as the plane had brought him back from LA, the whole way he listened to his and Daisy's favorite songs.(Elly i'll join in this here story! It looks great, just like ALL your storys)Daisy, Bo, Luke, Uncle Jesse, Boss, Rosco and the whole town of Hazzard were waiting at the Boars Nest to greet Enos and throw him a huge Welcome Back party, and everyone was really excited, especially Daisy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cowboy Posted September 7, 2009 Report Share Posted September 7, 2009 (Hey daisydukeXenosstrait, whatever you do dont become a Defense Lawyer! Would your brain over heat writing more then one or two sentences? )~Chet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 7, 2009 Report Share Posted September 7, 2009 (Hey daisydukeXenosstrait, whatever you do dont become a Defense Lawyer! Would your brain over heat writing more then one or two sentences? )~Chet(I'm sorry you don't like the way I write but you can't control that, all I was trying to do was join a story that my friend wrote and I like the idea) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elly May Duke Posted September 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 "Uncle Jesse, I'm nervous about meeting Enos." Daisy admitted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 "Uncle Jesse, I'm nervous about meeting Enos." Daisy admitted.Uncle Jesse said "Daisy everything will be fine, okay? I'm sure hes the same ol' Enos." and smiles Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elly May Duke Posted September 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Daisy nodded "I hope so, but well if he is changed. . .I guess I could accept it. Would be interesting to see him be a little bolder." Daisy admitted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B.L. Davenport Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 (I'm sorry you don't like the way I write but you can't control that, all I was trying to do was join a story that my friend wrote and I like the idea)(That is true DaisydukeXenosstraite noone can control the way anyone else writes but like I said before if it's worth doing its worth doing your best. All Chet said about the idea is the song titles had been a bit over done.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Daisy nodded "I hope so, but well if he is changed. . .I guess I could accept it. Would be interesting to see him be a little bolder." Daisy admitted.Uncle Jesse said "I'm sure he has not changed, OK?", at that moment a car pulled up in the parking lot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elly May Duke Posted September 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Daisy gasped grabbing her Uncle's hand "You think that's him Uncle Jesse?" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LoriDavenport Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Alright I've kept my mouth shut long enough...There's a specific difference in RR and RP. RR is more formal and done in paragraphs as Chet has tried to explain, notice the key word, tried. I suppose you get credit for trying though Chet, some people are just too hard headed to take the advice and tidy up their writing style. Ahem, as I was explaining, RP is done in usually sentences or the actions are done with asteriks. It looks to me that you two are RPing. Sure some stories have catching titles but the content needs a whole heck of a lot of work.What you said DaisyXEnos was true, we can't control your writing style, but you're in high school for crying out loud...you should know how to write a complete sentence with punctuation and spelling, correct mind you, tossed in. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Daisy gasped grabbing her Uncle's hand "You think that's him Uncle Jesse?"Uncle Jesse looked out the window and said "It's him" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elly May Duke Posted September 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Daisy tried not to cry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Daisy tried not to cry(Thanks Lori but I do know how to write in a complete sentece..but me and Elly are gonna go on with this story, ya'll can't shut it down..)Uncle Jesse said "Daisy girl, listen it will be okay" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elly May Duke Posted September 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Daisy nodded and laid her hand over her shorts pocket. . .she had something to tell Enos and something she had to give him. Her heart pounded Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cowboy Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 (This aint writting... its not even proper readable english half the time...ok 80% of the time. Its a good thing ya'll dont hand write this stuff on paper, it would really be too much effort.)~Chet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Daisy nodded and laid her hand over her shorts pocket. . .she had something to tell Enos and something she had to give him. Her heart poundedDaisy ran out side to Enos and Enos smiled "Daisy! Daisy get over here....its been way to long" and smiled at Daisy as Daisy walked, or should be said RAN at Enos. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elly May Duke Posted September 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Enos took her into his strong arms and held her close. He never wanted to be away from her again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 Enos took her into his strong arms and held her close. He never wanted to be away from her again.Daisy said "Enos...I missed you...don't ever leave again like that?!"(I do write my own storys thank you Chet...like i said were not gonna stop this story just cause ya'll wanna critiziize our writing) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elly May Duke Posted September 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 "I won't Daisy. I promise." then Enos reached into his pocket and brought out a little box for Daisy.(yeah Chet no offense but around here we don't really let comments like that bother us) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 "I won't Daisy. I promise." then Enos reached into his pocket and brought out a little box for Daisy.(yeah Chet no offense but around here we don't really let comments like that bother us)(I agree)Daisy smiled "What's this?" the idea in her head was different from the one he had in his. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elly May Duke Posted September 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 (*nodds*)"What is this?" Daisy asked. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
daisydukeXenosstrait Posted September 8, 2009 Report Share Posted September 8, 2009 (*nodds*)"What is this?" Daisy asked.Enos said "I-It's a ring..I just thought I'd get ya a little gift" and opend the box to revel a small diamond ring that was fitted just for Daisy and was engraved "Sorry I left,I love you." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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