K-Duke15 Posted February 5, 2012 Report Share Posted February 5, 2012 I want to see what everyone thinks of this. He steps out and laughter fills the room. The lavender dress with pink, yellow and white roses and daisies on it. The waist is stretched to its max and the straps hang down, ripped by his shoulders. He keeps pulling down the skirt, which barely covers his butt. He also kept his boots on which makes all this look even funnier. I start taking pictures. His face is red with embarrassment but once he sees me and what I’m doing, it changes to red with anger. I stand up and laugh harder. “Luke would you please walk Bo around?†I ask oh so sweetly. “Of course I can.†He leads him through the tables past everyone. He’s luck I didn’t say he had to wear heels too. I walk back to the bar and put my camera back in my bag. “I really hope ya didn’t want that dress back.†I tell Daisy who is holding onto the bar so she doesn’t fall. “No. I was expectin’ this to happen. The dress wasn’t my favorite anyway. That’s why I chose it.†We look at Bo who made his way to the other end of the room. I laugh and almost fall off the stool. I look at Uncle Jesse and he’s laughing more than we are. I’ve never seen him like this.So??????? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AyreWolf Posted February 6, 2012 Report Share Posted February 6, 2012 you got a good start there, but ya'll need a hook or attention grabber to get em excited. something to get and retain the viewer/reader etc. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i1976 Posted February 8, 2012 Report Share Posted February 8, 2012 I think this scene is really funny. I can imagine it in my head. Well described. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K-Duke15 Posted February 9, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 9, 2012 Thanks i1976. I think that this is the best part of the whole chapter. I had help from countrygirl1986 with the look of the dress. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K-Duke15 Posted February 11, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 11, 2012 The chapter is now up if ya want to read the whole thing.Just search for Don't You Recognize Your Own Kin on fanfiction under the Dukes of Hazzard tab. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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